Sports with Mix Genders

    
Girls play Softball and boys play Baseball, the only reason they are separated is because of the gender. Isn’t it unfair?   Genders shouldn’t be separated in sports.  “Difference in gender is not a reason for this type of discrimination!” This was said by Inna Hoxa. Girls and boys should play on the same teams because it helps girls excel in the game and it is our right.

    

        You might think that girls are not strong enough to play with boys. And you might think that girls could not play Rugby, Soccer, Baseball, and many other sports like boys. On the other hand, girls develop faster than boys. We are tougher than you think.

If girls play sports on the same team as boys it will make them more competitive. One example is Mo’ne Davis who is a girl that played baseball in the United States. Mo’ne Davis was the 18th girl who played baseball and she was the one of two girls who played in a Little League World Series. On April 15, 2014, Mo’ne Davis was a first girl that pitched a shout out for her team. As you see, Mo’ne Davis was a girl and she could also play Baseball which was a rough sport. When girls play with boys they can become better athletes so that is why genders should not matter when playing sports.

     It is only fair that girls get the same opportunity as boys when it comes to sports. “Human rights are women’s rights and women’s rights are human rights” according to Hillary Rodham Clinton, she is the United States Secretary of States. What she had just said it is also mean for sports too! Have you ever knew that girls and boys are both born with the same sporty genes? Women athletes get paid close to nothing compared to men. Now girls start to learn to be more competitive and boys start to learn to be more cooperative. There just only one-fifth of girls that get to have a physical education. If we compare it together, there are just only a quarter of girl compared to one-half of boys.

    Overall, sports should be participated by mixed genders. It will develop girls competitiveness and it will also develop boys cooperativeness. Mixed genders sports will form a big friendship. Therefore, it is really enjoyable to watch sports with mix genders playing

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